Can someone give advises to my self introduction?
Hi, guys. As a foreigner, I'm not very fluent in English writing, especially in the CV part. And asking someone to review my short self introduction requireslots of money. Also, I want to consult more precious advices from expereinced software programmers like you. So please advise me how to refine the self introduction part. Self intro: Hi, I’m Lucas. After getting my master degree from NCU(ranking 501 from CWUR in 2019), I went to design Android app and web for a WiFi music box. After providing the convenient interfaces and rich media functions like online radio and local music, our products became more attractive to the customers and this increased the chip sales in the market. After that, I joined in a web design team and my main role is to create new services. I developed a web interface to operate on the surveillance devices and manage the user permissions. I also added a log function to track users' behaviour. This working experience helps me a lot in the web deve
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Hi Lucas! I sent you a message with some corrections, I hope it'll help you to get the job you're applying for. :) (I also attached a PDF file with the corrections, so you can see what was changed)
Hi Lucas! I recommend you to check out a youtube video from Jeff Su called: “Tell me about yourself”. He has some great tips that can help you out :) You can watch the video with slower speed and subtitles to understand more :)
Here's how I would give your self-intro after looking at your profile items that you submitted. //BEGIN SELF INTRO Hi, I'm Lucas. I have a Master's Degree from NCU (You need to say the words of the acronyms here-acronyms are NOT useful unless you know that your audience already knows what they mean). I designed an Android app and a WiFi music box. After providing convenient interfaces like online radio and local music, our products become more attractive to the customers and this increased our sales in the market. After that, I joined a web design team and my main role is to create new services. I developed a web interface to operate on the surveillance devices and manage the user permissions. I also added a log function to track users' behavior. This working experience helps me a lot in web development. //END SELF INTRO You might want to shorten this a little bit. Maybe mention a computing language that you are proficient in and the apps you made using that language.
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I would advise you to keep your self-introduction video concise. Firstly, you need to focus on your teaching philosophy, ie. take some time to reflect on your teaching philosophy and indicate what you want to achieve with your students. Secondly, use simple language so that your target students understand what you’re taking about. Using bombastic words will not help you get your message across. Thirdly, include your personal interests. This is great as it will socially bonds you with some of your prospect students. Finally, show enthusiasm while delivering your self-introduction video. Let your personality shine in through your video. Show enthusiasm for your subject matter and teaching in general. I wish you all the best with your self-introductory video! Fingers crossed 🤞
